BOOKS ‘n COZY SPOTS BOOK REVIEWS – Heirloom Plantation by Rick Johnson

BOOKS ‘n COZY SPOTS BOOK REVIEWS – Heirloom Plantation by Rick Johnson


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~ 4 Stars ~

Review of HEIRLOOM PLANTATION, by Rick Johnson

Historical Fiction / Humour /  American Civil War

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Reviewed by Jaycee ~ for Books ‘N Cozy Spots Book Reviews,

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We were taught how our country was started. The lessons our country learned from decisions and actions taken.

Remember everything you were taught and erase it from your mind.

My name is Wood. I’m a white, cotton picking slave. I tasted the freedom for a moment, and it was grand. But as the saying went, ‘Born a slave and you’ll die a slave’. What I wasn’t prepared for was how much my life would change when I was taken to the Heirloom Plantation.

This is my untold story of life before freedom. My life of chains and cotton. When the black people ruled the plantations and the white race picked the cotton. Lawd have mercy.

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I feel as though I have just relived a life-altering period as viewed from deep in the rabbit hole, and oddly enough, it almost makes more sense this way.  If nothing deeper, Heirloom Plantation is an engaging and often humorous twist on everything we knew, or thought we knew, about slavery and the North-South conflict.  More hopefully, it will be taken as a kinder, gentler reminder of an unkind and anything but gentle period in the history of man, wherein several well-placed tweaks at human nature as well as recorded history, will cause thinking people to…well, think.

With an upside-down perspectives of southern slaves, Plantation owners, and politicians alike, several painful decades are explored through individual accountings of life as it was and in so doing, debunks inaccuracies while humanizing the plights of slaves and the huge tolls exacted for all.  Rich, colourful characters are brought to life in many ways, though I appreciate the small ways the most.  These are the humanizing events;  not necessarily the humorous ones, though occasionally so, but the everyday beliefs that crushed the soul of a slave, and those that entitled the slave-owner, without question or insight.

I think sometimes lessons-learned are more effective when liberally dosed with open-minded approaches and a little bit of well-placed, gentle, inoffensive humour.  And Mr. Johnson is certainly the Master of that.  This kind of view of ourselves and where we have been is the most likely way to ensure we never return there again.  At least, one can live in hope.

But seriously:  buttermilk?!

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HEIRLOOM PLANTATION also received the following ratings:


TWIST FACTOR ~ History like you’ve never heard it told, and infinitely better for it! ~

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BONUS FACTOR ~ A fervent hope that hindsight is 20/20 ~


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Book Tour – Torn and Frayed by Rodd Clark

Book Tour – Torn and Frayed by Rodd Clark


 Torn and Frayed

 Gabriel Church Tales Series Book 2

“Conscience isn’t something all people are born with…”

Gabriel Church is a portrait in contrast. It would be easy to get lost in his pale-blue eyes, ache with the need to feel the strength of his masculine frame. He appears to be nothing but animal and instinct. The only people who know the full depth of that truth are dead, murdered, or two thousand miles away.

Gabe is a serial killer. For the first time in his life, he has more on his mind than his own survival. This time he is running from Seattle to protect the only person he thinks innocent in his laundry list of crime and murder: Christian Maxwell, his biographer and unexpected lover. Drawn to a place he never thought to return, Gabe finds new and different realities. Realities that insist he let go of his tragic past, those incredible perceptions of God, and his own divinity. He must open his eyes to what the love of a good man can do to heal a broken soul.

But when the killer is confronted by his own willingness to love and sacrifice, he is forced to ultimately ask the question: Just how far will he go to save a life . . . when all he’s ever done is take them?

Categories: Bisexual, Crime Fiction, Fiction, Gay Fiction, M/M Romance, Mystery, Thriller



The relationship that Gabriel Church and Christian Maxwell shared was based on a period that overshadowed any real emotional bond. If the situation had been normal, Christian might’ve learned that Gabriel used gallows humor far too frequently, or that he had a cruel streak buried under his handsome exterior. As much as they thought they cared for each other, neither looked closely enough at the reasons and the whys regarding the draw each one felt for the other. Gabriel was a serial killer running on an uneasy apprehension of arrest, and he’d never allowed himself to get closer to anyone, particularly a stranger like Maxwell. But paramount to that, he was a man who hadn’t had a friend in nearly more years than he could count. They’d somehow formed a connection, and the end result had been greater than Gabriel could’ve ever thought he’d achieve. Their friendship had turned sexual, but it had more to do with the evolution of simple human contact and a desire to have something neither man could have guessed would become their future.

The allure that bound them had been based on something bent and unconventional. It was this distinction that outshone all else, and was the only thing that might’ve remained standing. It was a Romeo and Juliet tragedy in the making; two souls who’d shared a single foxhole, yet neither could see that clearly enough in those earlier days.

Christian had all the “tells” of someone who was distrustful of Gabe from the beginning. Maybe it was his bent smile and the shadow of a killer underneath such an attractive façade. Or maybe it was the blossoming of the writer’s sexuality and the heat that was generating between them, unbeknownst to him. Theirs had been a strange relationship, more parasitical than not. Chris wanted to learn all he could about the mind of a serial murderer, and Gabe hungrily fed off the man’s undeniable devotion. Even before they’d fucked the first time, Gabe had felt the odd stirrings in his jeans. He’d disregarded the titillation at the time, and later he wrote it off as some type of control, knowing that whatever he had the writer wanted in spades. Christian’s eyes had told the truth, his crystal gaze lapping up the image of the man across the room. It was in some twisted satisfaction that Gabe likened the writer to a puppy, trying desperately to please a stern owner and the clearly visible desire to lick at the stubble on his cheeks.

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Rodd lives in Dallas, TX at the moment but hails from the sticks of Oklahoma. Check out his web presence at RODDCLARK.COM. Interested in the M/M Mystery, Romance and Thriller genres but has a varied interest in many books. It has been written that his writing has a very dark and distinctive voice with a need for deep exploration and analysis. “Torn and Frayed” is the sequel to his popular romantic thriller, “Rubble and the Wreckage.” The third chapter of the series should be released later in the year and give readers a chance to see how their wicked story is resolved

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BOOKS ‘n COZY SPOTS BOOK REVIEWS – Dream Gods by J. Johanis

BOOKS ‘n COZY SPOTS BOOK REVIEWS – Dream Gods by J. Johanis


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3.5 Stars

Review of DREAM GODS by J. Johanis

Fantasy-Gods / Dark Erotica / M-m and menage / brief M-f / Non-con / Dub-con / Abuse-Violence

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Reviewed by Jaycee ~ for Books ‘N Cozy Spots Book Reviews,

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12509642_1741463326086875_4910098201508416915_nFor the first time in three years, Aya is finally free, but with his freedom comes the pain of all he’s lost. Seeing Akad and Marduk together makes him realize how badly he has messed up. By betraying Marduk, he ruined his chance with the one god he desires more than anything.

Aya needs time to heal and put his world back together, but the trial against the Order looms over him. As the trial begins, Akad, Marduk, and Aya are ensnared in a web of jealousy, backstabbing, and cut-throat politics. Were they crazy to think they could stand up to the Order? If the gods of the Order can still rip their lives apart, their chances of receiving justice may be next to impossible. But if they fail to bring the Order down, Aya may never truly be free.

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“Dream Gods” picks up where book one in the series, “Claimed by the Order”, left off, and yet the opening scene and various flashbacks will get the reader who missed book one up to speed quite satisfactorily, I think.

If you want a Fantasy tale full of every kind of excess, of Master-slave dynamic in all definitions of the concept, then this is your book.  If you want it fluffy, not gonna happen.   This is a dark, gritty tale that is sometimes consumptive in its level of murk and depravity.  I recall feeling as desolate as Aya and Marduk at times, as they relived their experiences with and pursued justice against, the higher Gods; “higher” being a relative term in this case.

Aya dared to dream of a God who made him feel, and because of his abilities as a Dream God he placed himself in a 4 year nightmare that nearly broke him, and certainly caused him to abandon principles to save himself and to lose his soul mate in the process.

Marduk, having originally been duped by Aya, however unwillingly on Aya’s part, found himself in exactly the same position as a slave and plaything to a secret Order of the Higher Gods.  Marduk is something of a strategist however, and finds some powerful help and love with another God.

The gist of this second book, without giving away any details, is the “legal” process if you will, of shedding light on the Secret Order, dismantling it and punishing the perpetrators.  Testimony will force the principals to relive the personal atrocities and degradation they faced, and success is not a given, but ultimately it is the only way of putting the nightmare behind them.

The parallels one can draw to reality when a less powerful victim must face the influence and all the forces that influence can bring to bear, and the price they pay in the doing of it, are neatly drawn and are no less daunting mentally, simply because this is fiction.  I found the tale a difficult read at times.  It is very graphic and descriptive in the violence and abuse and subjugation.  Yet it is also a tale of right-versus-might that ends with a victory for Karma, and personal victories for the victims.

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 DREAM GOD also received the following ratings:


HEAT FACTOR ~ 4 Flames


STING FACTOR ~ Extreme ~


TWIST FACTOR ~blackmail, manipulation, political intrigue in the extreme~

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Backstage with the Twins – Adjusting to Amazon & the renumbering of the DoB series

Backstage with the Twins – Adjusting to Amazon & the renumbering of the DoB series
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Amazon is always making changes to their sight. Changing and improving on how books are displayed and how readers can find them. So its important Authors do the same. Regardless of your thoughts on Amazon they are in fact the largest retailer of books and if you want your books to reach your readers you sell on Amazon. What’s important is keeping up. Amazon gives authors more control over their product page than any other retailer around, yet many authors don’t use it to their advantage. Consider your product page the window display to your store. Amazon gives you the chance to dress it up and I’m here to say… you should!!  It also requires some regular maintenance. Sometimes when the wide spread rearrangements take place a book or two might get dropped from your author listings. Such as the case for us, finding just today that Quantum Mates: What Torin Wants was no longer showing up under Talon’s author page. An easy fix, but would have remained absent if we didn’t make regardless house calls.  Another reason to always make checks is sometimes our blurb and details can get jammed together. and don’t check just the kindle page, check your paperback edition, and refresh your pages regularly. Now on to what’s new!

One of the newest gadget added is the series display widget on the product page of books listed as  part of a series and I have to say its an attrative feature.

Going from this

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This also makes it much easier to promote your series. But one thing you might have to take a look at is how you number your books. For us, The Dominion of Brothers series presently has 6 books out, but in way of the title numbers one of the books is listed as 1.5 so when viewing the series on Amazon there appears to only be 5. Amazon’s listings doesn’t allow for so called ‘.5 ‘ books and the results is such book are left out of the series listings. For us it meant Domming the Heiress doesn’t show up and the results has hurt the books over all sales. Readers don’t always know to look for it. We had spoken with Amazon several times over this and at one point we did have the book connected to the series link but without a title number. Now, with the new look Domming the Heiress has been dropped. But there is a way to get around it and that is to simply change the listing number in Amazon. This doesn’t have to change the book. DtH is still book 1.5 in the DoB series, but from now on will be listed as book 2 on Amazon, so that it will finally be included in the series display.

Readers can click on the link to the left of the display which will take them to the series product page, it lets them see which books in that series they have already purchased and down at the bottom they can leave a review for the series all together. Pretty nifty.

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Another super cool thing Amazon has it a Book Preview widget you can use to embed right into your own website, so that readers can preview your book without having to be redirected to another site called Kindle Instant Book Previews. With a few options available, you can use either the resizable embed codes or use the url code to get one of these!!




The only glitch I am seeing so far on these is the limit of browser support, but hopefully other browsers will get on board with this. Still, its a nice bell and whistle to impress blog visitors. Well now that I’ve just dumped a bunch of homework in your lap, I think I’ll stop there.





Right One 4 Diesel is available now in print!

Right One 4 Diesel is available now in print!

Yes, you read that right. Want to get your hard copy heading your way right now? Well then you can; just hop over to Createspace and order your copy now!!

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Book Tour – Hades: Of Gods and Monsters by Wulf Franco Godgluck

Book Tour – Hades: Of Gods and Monsters by Wulf Franco Godgluck


This is not a story about a hero, or some bad boy-badass-antihero.
This is a love story between two monstrous villains and one valiant kid, held together by their entwined heartstrings.
It won’t be pretty.
It won’t be pleasant.
There’s no fluffy good feelings about it.
It will rip out your heart and never give it back.

Breno Hades el Oscuro took no bullshit from anyone. He ruled the crime world of the United States. When the King fell, what was left in the ashes was not the small boy that grew up without his father, not the same kid that chose a life of crime at seventeen, nor was it the King who had killed and clawed through a river of blood to stand at the top.

The King was dragged from his throne of bones into a deep dark pit, leaving only the raw flesh of a savage monster to crawl out of Hell.
One that knew love, but didn’t want it again.

Kemono Orochi was destined to inherit the legacy of his father, known as The Dragon’s Tongue. It was an inheritance he never wanted it, never desiring the power that came with the title of Dragon. Kemono ended it all by tearing off the Dragon’s head, watching the serpent’s remains be consumed in hellfire. Now tormented by the scars of his past inflicted by his father, he is struggling to come to terms with the Akuma he has become.

One that wants to devour everyone in his path to protect the only one that matters to him.

The only person that had ever made his icy heart beat.

His heart. His love. His beautiful pride.

Rex Hunter dreams of becoming a principal ballerino…all fierce, like a Phoenix. But this Phoenix has lost his wings and fallen prey, straight into the clutched claws and callus hands of two vicious beasts. Each bore the blackest of hearts, each desiring to keep him safe, cherished and loved unconditionally. Or was Rex just destined to be the goo that would stick two shattered souls together and prevent them from forever falling to pieces?

There will be blood, gore and nasty shit.

There will be watersports, crude, angry, sometimes sensual and other times just downright dirty and dysfunctional sex.


There will always be LOVE…

Because even villains understand the tortured scars love leaves in her wake.



Pages or Words: 118,000 words

Categories: Contemporary, Crimed Fiction, Erotica, Gay Fiction, Romance, Thriller


Hades stood in front of the abandoned warehouse a couple of miles away from the one he’d set Scar on fire in. Wendigo on his left, Viper on his right. Cracker not far from him, while Witch twitched in excitement behind Hades. These were his boys, the ones who would go to Hell with him, bust every bitch down there, and stand by Hades’ side as he claimed the throne for himself.

The bitter taste of his own blood filled his mouth from biting his lip—fuckin’ Scar should have been here too, this went motherfuckin’ deeper than Hades had first thought. And Hades was gonna get Scar out of prison, he was going to go on his fuckin’ knees and beg his brother for forgiveness. And still plant a fist in your cunty face for not being honest with your brothers.

Scar could have told Hades the Russians were holding his lover as ransom, part of their plan to get Hades’ ass into the Big House and out of the way.

The Russians had gone too fuckin’ far. For some reason, the fuckin’ swine thought they could fuck with whoever they wanted and that everyone should tremble in their presence. They didn’t do fuckin’ Barney and Friends with the other crime lords, they were too busy making enemies. Khaiton was clawing at Hades’ balls, scratching it where it wasn’t even motherfuckin’ itching, in a whole new fucked-up way. Hades had a lot to do before he could put those fuckin’ pigs out of their miserable existence.

His chest pulled painfully tight as he closed his eyes, reflecting on the past two days of sheer hell, aside from him being a screwed-up mess of worry, emotions and fuckin’ revelations and shit. Hades didn’t think his heart could rupture again. It had. Fucking blew the shards of scrap metal Beo’s train wreck had imbedded in Hades’ stapled-together-heart and ripped them right the fuck out when he’d opened that apartment door.


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They come to me in the night, creeping into my head. Their voices are all different, their stories all dissimilar, but they keep saying the same thing…

“Show us, tell us, bring us into your world, and make us known.”

Then I sit and they take over. They tell their tales of love, loss and sinister misfortune. Not all of them get a happy ending, but they are pleased when their part is written.

I sometimes find myself lost in my own mind; a world very similar to our own yet so different. Things don’t go bump in the night— they squeal and crawl under your skin, making you grind your teeth, and making your stomach turn over and putting your nerves on edge. Then there’s the drama. Oh, the drama!

Wulf Francú Godgluck hails from South Africa. His work is not for the faint-hearted! In his books you’ll find… all the beasties with their nasty claws and teeth, and some you didn’t even know existed.

But the monsters aren’t all real. Some live inside us. Who knows what he will make you discover about yourself, lurking in your heart, behind the closed walls in the deep, black recesses where no light penetrates? Wulf will steal your heart and never give it back. More than likely, he’ll pin it to the wall with a bobbypin and sit there sipping his tea while you writhe and squeal on the floor…


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The most anticipated couple: Diesel Gentry and Paris Dalqeaute are here!!

The most anticipated couple: Diesel Gentry and Paris Dalqeaute are here!!

JANUARY 29th !!!


The Dominion of Brothers Series finally brings you the most anticipated couple: Diesel Gentry and Paris Dalqeaute in—

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Diesel Gentry knows exactly want he wants. Like his brother, he wants a Unicorn, a life slave to surrender her every desire and need to him— who is, in essence and body, the very same woman his brother, Trenton Leos, already possesses. He also wants Paris Dalqeaute.

He had that powerhouse body in his domineering grip once before, but Diesel purposely let the fallen angel slip through his fingers.  Being a Master of Doms within the BDSM lifestyle, Diesel knew he had to set Paris free— thinking and hoping Paris would eventually come back to him, submit to Diesel willingly, and not just because Paris’ job description required him to. After all, Paris had been hired as the director for the fetish and BDSM events down at the island resort Diesel and his brothers owned. Except Paris never did return; while he proved his value to his title, he has also been using his work to hide from Diesel.

It’s been a year now and Diesel’s bed and life have remained empty ever since. It’s time the running stopped.

Finding Paris wasn’t going to be the hard part— breaking down his walls to trust the two of them to commit to a life together was going to be the real challenge.

But even if Diesel succeeds, there is a problem with their future— what’s to come threatens the lives of everyone Diesel loves— and he doesn’t even know it yet.

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Right One 4 Diesel is a part of a series that, until now, has been comprised of largely standalone books. In this next installment to the series, that readability is no longer the case. Right One 4 Diesel is not a standalone read; it is an action-packed novel that does not allow room for re-introduction of its supportive characters who were introduced in Books 1 through 4 of the Dominion of Brothers series. While it is recommended that you read all of the books in the series, Books 1 and Book 4 are needed to be able to follow along with the least chance of encountering “holes” in information or plot.

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Trenton dropped down on one of the benches and sat in silence in front of the funeral home while Katianna, his last rock in a stormy sea of emotions, knelt at his feet. Together the two watched the four funeral brigades drive by in a somber parade.

The last vehicle remaining was his Knight Conquest, its glossy black armored body soaking up sunlight as if remiss that someone he knew had been killed doing a job he gave them, and equally obtuse that he could not follow any one of them without dishonoring the others.

Song birds chirped from trees and it was just one more thing to remind him life went on and often without a care to the loss of others. He couldn’t bear it. He had been given a job to protect that family and now he had failed and at the cost of his own.

“Kat, why don’t you go inside and use the restroom before we go.”

“I’m o—”

“Go.” His order somber and quiet, but insistent. She was hesitant, but finally got up and headed in. He waited— stared at his truck, the epitome of protective vehicles and yet he had not protected them. The upsurge of anguish became too much to keep restrained any longer and he was suddenly to his feet, his gun pulled from his shoulder holster— he aimed for the Knight and opened fire. “AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHhhhhhh!”

Bullets hit and bounced off the Knight, leaving shattered pock marks in the armor-glass coating then ricocheting in all directions. Trenton didn’t stop squeezing the trigger until the gun clicked with an empty chamber. He still wasn’t finished and wasted no time, pulling another clip from his lapel pocket, reloaded, and opened fired once more until it, too, ran dry.

The outburst drained him. He crashed to his knees, folded over into a ball until his head cracked on the pavement where he remained, and cried.

Katianna was suddenly there next to him. Wrapping around him like a soothing blanket to shield him from the storm. If only the storm had been out there.

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We Came— We Saw— and then we made it sexy.

And that’s pretty much how the Twins came to write Erotic Romances and Dark Fantasies. Both Talon P.S. and Princess S.O. have been writing together since they were kids, always challenging and competing with each other, and always each other’s biggest supporters.

Writing has always been an affair creating Fictions of Dark Apocalyptic Fantasy and Film Scripts in the Action/Drama and a few Sci-Fi’s. It wasn’t until they began an ancient history tale that the works turned to the Erotic Genre and they’ve been hooked ever since.

After a life time of gathering experiences, and honing their story telling skills, they have finally started putting them to novel size tales. Sadly, Talon passed away in 2012 leaving the books he started with his twin, entrusting her as his ghost writer, making her promise to see them completed before joining him.

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Two Writers Rambling – Tips for writing First Person

Two Writers Rambling – Tips for writing First Person

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Maybe it’s just me, but I seem to be seeing another mass wave of published books coming across my news feed where the authors are largely uneducated in basic writing rules. I’m never one to discourage writing, but I am one to call out blatant mistakes if you’re planning to publish. Because if you’re making them, you’re not ready to publish. Now before anyone gets disgruntled and their feathers ruffled, hear me out.

(mostly) Writes write because they love to write and have a story to tell. But publishing isn’t done for fun, and regardless of what your reasons are, it’s a business. You’d never open a restaurant if you had cockroaches crawling up the floor, right?

SO I’ve decided to start sharing some write tips Take them with a grain of salt if you wish, but I hope you take them to your writing. First up – common mistakes made when writing in First Person.


To start here are some examples of the various writing perspectives:

First Person

(there is actually even a snip of second person in it)

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Second Person

(when the story or character talks to ‘you’ and often in reference to the ‘reader’. This is intermittent with First person)

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Third Person

(third person with a finishing quip in second person addressed as ‘who’)

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Writing in First person can be a great POV to work from. It gives you so much more access to the recess of your character’s mind than writing in any other form, but it comes at a price. In first person you cannot know what any of the other characters are thinking, you also can’t know what they are doing outside of line of view. Doing so is a form of distant perception and unlike first person distant perception in which only falls under poor writing, 2nd person distant perception can’t even take place realistically unless your character is a telepath. For this article we’re going to leave all telepaths and hidden overhead mirrors out of the argument.

While most writers, even novices, do well to not cross that first line of scrimmage; it’s the second one that gets ignore far too often.  Here are some erroneous examples plucked randomly out of teasers I’ve seen lately:

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EX 1: “No, I am reading,” I whined and he reached down and took my kindle. “Hey that is grounds for divorce,” I shouted as he read over the first paragraph on the page I was on.

While there are a number of things wrong with the sentence I’m only going to address the second person distant perception: ‘He read the first paragraph’. He did? How do you know? Were his lips moving? There are no overhead mirrors (**refer to rule above).

This may seem like a small offense, but where there is one there are others. What’s happening here is this. Unless the 2nd character read allowed or told the First person he’d read the first paragraph the FP can’t possibly know what part the 2ndP read if they read it at all.

So how to fix this.

ONE SUGGESTION: “No, I am reading,” I whined when he grabbed the kindle from my hands. “Hey that is grounds for divorce,” I shouted as his eyes appeared to scan over its contents.

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EX 2: I waited out in the truck, digging for a cigarette to pass time while John went around the corner to take a leak behind a dumpster and play target practice with the rats crawling about.

Here the line of scrimmage came in the form of a large wall or building, yet the author still managed to give x-ray vision to the MC enabling them to see through walls and around corners where he somehow knew his buddy was using his yellow squirt gun to shoots rats. Really?

ONE SUGGESTION: I waited out in the truck while John went around the corner to take a leak. When he didn’t come back right away I started digging around for a cigarette. It shouldn’t have taken this long, but knowing him he was probably back there making target practice on the rats, because he was that much of an asshole.

This helps lessens the distant perception by turning it into a self-suggestive possibility based on the assumption the MC knows his friend rather well.

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EX 3:  Jackson’s hand hovered over the rook, then withdrew to scrub at his chin. He wouldn’t look at me, wondering if he could risk a cheating move using his bishop to D-3 to corner my knight and I wouldn’t catch it. He’d be wrong.

What he’s like all up in the other character’s head block. Thing is the FP can’t possibly know what they are thinking, (**telepathy is not allowed see rules above) certainly not to this point, no matter how much the two characters might know each other. The FP might be able to read several expressions and there for speculate with only a margin of error what ‘might’ be going on the 2nd character’s head, but even that should be clarified.

ONE SUGGESTION:  Jackson’s hand hovered over the rook, then he withdrew to scrub at his chin. He wouldn’t look at me. He had to know he was stuck and I wondered if he was the sort who might consider cheating. Because the only way out would be to do so. But if he thought he could get away with it… he’d be wrong.



Perspectives are boundaries that really need to be respected in storytelling, no matter what genre you write.  Breaking them only shows the reader that in order to get your story written, you cut corners rather than fleshing the story out so that l characters and elements were contained within their own perceptions. This is the lazy way out and with poor writing quality.

So when writing in First Person remember that your character can—

  1. Only know what is going on in their own head – unless they’re telepathically mind probing
  1. Can only speculate facial expressions – the more the FP know a person the more expression that might recognize, but they would not have that same familiarity with a stranger or someone they just recently met.
  1. Can only see what is in front of them – unless they are superman with x-ray vision
  1. Can only know of events they have been informed of – In other words, they can’t possibly know the Intergalactic space villains are plotting an attack on their home world unless their spies came back or sent word of it.



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